Review Detail of Desolati0n in Legacy of the Spiral

Hi readers! I just wanted to thank everyone who has taken the time to read my story so far. As some of you may have noticed, I'm very new to creative writing. I don't have any professional training, so I still have a lot to learn about technique, style, pacing, and character development. I started writing this story mostly for fun as a way to explore my imagination and share it with others. I know there are probably many areas for improvement. I'm still figuring out the process as I go. But I'm having a blast bringing this world and these characters to life! If any experienced writers out there have noticed things I could do better or have advice for an amateur like me, I'd greatly appreciate your thoughts. I know I have weak spots when it comes to descriptive writing, believable dialogue, cohesive plotting, and more. I'm hoping to improve with each chapter. Please feel free to provide constructive criticism or point out any glaring errors. The more I can learn, the better I'll get! My goal is to improve my writing abilities while sharing these fun stories. To everyone following along on this journey with me, thank you! I hope you're enjoying it and will stick with me as I keep working to level up my skills. Your readership means the world. Thanks for being part of this story!