Pretty good so far, but with so few chap (10 for now), a deep review isn't possible. But here is a slight personal critic or advise (take it as you like, or not at all. Your choice) :It's obvious you are writing a "cliche" and comited to them. Which is GREAT ! CLICHÉ are the veine of fanfic, and I hope you "use" them and not be "used" by them. Just the slam rant of a nobody, but overall it's a good premice. Hope to see more of it.
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