Review Detail of Joao_Pires in Fantasy: Reincarnated as a Wolf

Item: Fantasy: Reincarnated as a Wolf
Rating: 3.6

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I can't say much about the story because it is just starting but, there is a lack of punctuation in the sentences and the way the MC thinks is really weird (Oh, I was just drinking and now I'm a wolf, oh well, let's just open the status). I'm not saying there is a need for a existencial crisis (I hate useless drama) but I think there is lack of thinking. It sounds more like a person telling how his day went and not his thoughts.

Fantasy: Reincarnated as a Wolf

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And, in the small battle, you didn't explain how he attacked. You just wrote that their bodies rottened and not how he made that happen ( Did he send his energy from afar? Is the energy invisible? How far can he send that attack?)

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DaoistWzIBjuTác giảDaoistWzIBju

Sorry, but I just started writing, so I am not good at it.

Joao_Pires:And, in the small battle, you didn't explain how he attacked. You just wrote that their bodies rottened and not how he made that happen ( Did he send his energy from afar? Is the energy invisible? How far can he send that attack?)

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