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Good day Readers. After completing the first volume of my novel, this author has finally decided to rate his own book. I don't have much to say but I can say as much (if you get what I mean....probably not😅). Anyways. I'll kick off with World Building. Honestly, I didnt have hope for this particular novel since my past few years of constant failures🥲. But the increased interest in the book had urged me to build it up properly. It's set in medieval times, but there will be a mix of modern days. After all, there is a whole family of tech amongst them. It's a mix of fantasy and system, where only a specific set of people have been excluded from the system. Is it a curse or a blessing? One could say it limits humans but others would disagree. Well, I'm interested to find out which is the case for Raph. As you continue reading this novel, you'll get to explore a lot more. I mixed it a lot of elements and hopefully it comes out in a beautiful blend.....and not a catastrophe. The story starts slow, but the constant effort I've made Raph go through to attain strength has been all worth it. I noticed along the way, how some certain things may not add up. I want to encourage you to ask questions below this review if interested. Then the Character Development/Design. Well, except for his sisters, we haven't really gotten a whole feel of the Characters yet. I'll bet most people dont actually know who the main leading characters are except for Raph. Would be nice to hear what you think though. Further growth and description of each significant character will be portrayed from volume 2 as well as choosing our final leading characters. Then we move on to Story Development and Writing Quality. My writing quality is average at best as most- okay maybe some authors tend to make little mistakes every now and then . Of course, I will work on this and eventually, my writing quality as well as my sentence structures may become captivating to my Readers. The Story Development should have been easily paced, with a bit of turn and curves every now and then. I kind of think I'm working on that part. A novel that is easily predictable would turn boring at one point , sadly, it's not exactly easy incorporating surprise while keeping an even pace. Expect something good from Volume 2 in that case. Lastly Updating Stability. Well excuse me for being a Med Student, but time is of essence here 😭. Of course, I have been working on a roster to even everything out and hopefully, it will play out as I want it to. In general, Raph, his family bond as well as the friends, and relationships in the future has potential. I hope you stick around to read that potential bloom. Hah! No Harem. We won't know who his love interest is for a while, but steamy stuff from after they find each other....probably. Expect the unexpected if you can. ...(men of culture🤔) scenarios are still in consideration. But in all, Thank you readers for having the time to read this Authors work and I hope you stick around to the end.

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