Review Detail of Brian_Hanes_117 in Oath of Being Temporally Yours

This story has a catchy cover and title. The writing is flowery, poetic, and touching. The author clearly has a wide vocabulary. The description seems to hit most areas including visual and each sentence feels differently. I definitely think this is an awesome story. With that being said, the description goes overboard at times where it could be more efficient and straightforward. Remember, you as a writer want to reach as many readers as possible. Part of that is making sure your story is well-polished and edited. Part of that is thinking outside of the box when explaining things as you did. Another aspect of that is not going over-the-top to explain every single detail, as many people are not that interested in every detail; try to strike a balance. I wish the best to the creator on her/his future projects. To the author, I welcome you to check out my story "Avatar: The Vindicated Avenger". It is a spinoff of the fan expansion of the hit animated series Avatar: The Last Airbender, called "Avatar: Macai's Journey". I would love to know what you think of it. https://www.webnovel.com/book/avatar-the-vindicated-avenger_26486522605265405