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malinizgeldii
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2023-06-28 01:18

A talking system automatically caused my score to drop by 2 points. . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

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mow
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Unfortunately, sentient systems are the worst.

General_Mahoraga
General_MahoragaLv3

True

mow:Unfortunately, sentient systems are the worst.
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XzDanielzX
XzDanielzXLv3

systems in general are bad

mow:Unfortunately, sentient systems are the worst.
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It's a half decent story.The world and the aspects of the world the author includes makes it worth a read. The author includes quite alot of aspects from dc comics into his story which other authors either neglect or cant be bothered to add.This is one of the main positives of this fanfic. Including good plot points from the comics.The things that make the good less apparent is the obvious hatred the author has for dc heroes. While it fits to a certain degree due to the moral compass of the mc, it goes too far at certain points.By this I mean the mc constantly calling wonder woman a 'sl*t' over and over again.I wouldn't find fault in this if it wasn't for the fact that the mc never justified him saying this and the fact that at some point all the mc has been talking about is how he wants to have multiple wives.To hammer in the point that he really wants multiple wives the author kills half the male population as a plot point in order for countries world wide to allow men to marry multiple women. Literally out of nowhere as the mc was in another dimension when it happened.And while the grammar isnt mtl level of bad it gets worse over time. By this I mean that while you can see some faults through the first maybe 40 chapters, after some point it becomes dribble. Still not horrible, but enough to where it feels like a child wrote the story.An example of this would be when the mc says things to the effect of " you have a bad mustache" while fighting sinestro. It wouldn't have been bad if he didn't say it over and over again on repeat in contiuously worse grammar sometimes saying it 3 times in the same sentance. But thats just being nitpicking on my part.All in all its mediocre, its worth a read if you have nothing else to read. Or if you like fanfics where the mc kills.p.s. the author really should add the romance and harem tag if you're gonna add it to the story. Especially with how the mc will most likely go to the marvel universe after some dc arcs

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