Review Detail of Brian_Hanes_117 in Unknown Phenomenon

The story is well written. The updates seem to be steady, and it develops naturally. The cover is engrossing, and the intro is atypical. On the other hand, the writing format is a little odd. It seems every sentence is spaced out but I'm not really sure why that is. It would make sense if there were some sort of pattern, like spacing each quotation, however that is not the case from what I can tell. There are also moments there are proper paragraphs before going back to spacing one sentence at a time. Putting that aside, I'd like to see a bit more description. Description can be done in many ways. It can refer to specific narration that describes how characters, the environment, and other things look in the story. It can be narration that lays out what certain things smell or sound like (which isn't used as often but is pleasant to see every now-and-then). With that being said, I wish the author the best on their journey. This is an entertaining piece for whoever may be interested. Dear writer, I welcome you to check out my story "Avatar: The Vindicated Avenger". It is a spinoff of the fan expansion of the hit animated series Avatar: The Last Airbender, called "Avatar: Macai's Journey". I would love to know what you think of it. https://www.webnovel.com/book/avatar-the-vindicated-avenger_26486522605265405