I read the synopsis and it sooned sooo cool what I understand was that mc was a kind of purger that's tasked with protecting the universe I'm very excited to give it a try and I hope i won't be disappointed [img=coins][img=update]
Sergeantgreen
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giốngThanks for the review. I just released an extra chapter to celebrate my first review. So Thank you for your review and your rating. I hope my story won't dissapoint you. Just as a little warning; it is not a super fast paced story, so don't expect a story where the Mc jumps from universe to universe and slaughters heroes left and right. My focus is more on writing a intresting story instead of a rushed one with an overpowered Mc.
in my own opinion I think the character is stupid he gets into fights with Ron because he annoying, his mom is able to write letters to his teacher to challenge him. His own teachers doesn't believe him. he haven't started to search who the mc. I'm not gonna lie though the concept of a person unalive hero is interesting so I'm gonna stay
Sergeantgreen:Thanks for the review. I just released an extra chapter to celebrate my first review. So Thank you for your review and your rating. I hope my story won't dissapoint you. Just as a little warning; it is not a super fast paced story, so don't expect a story where the Mc jumps from universe to universe and slaughters heroes left and right. My focus is more on writing a intresting story instead of a rushed one with an overpowered Mc.
I'm sorry to hear that you don't like the charakter but i can understand your reasoning. As this is my first novel i may be unable to always convey all thoughts and emotions of the charakter in a clear way, without acctually writining it down. i wanted to show and not tell how the charakter is and the charakter is a bit stupid or childish at the beginning. in his own world he lacked social contacts with people his own age and it is showing in his behavior. at the beginning he wanted to be like you probably wanted him to be. Someone with a great focus on the hero and he may even get back to that after two or three universes but now he is having friends and enemies (if you want to call ron that) for the first time. While struggling to find the hero, he also gets every day problems because he is unable to shut off all his emotions. He won't be someone that will kill without second thoughts. and i want to explore the emtional trauma that comes with that. as for the hero search itself, i would be interested in how you would start the search for the hero. maybe i missed something really obvious. (Some mistake Atlas made were intentional but maybe not all so please enlighten me)
truedevil:in my own opinion I think the character is stupid he gets into fights with Ron because he annoying, his mom is able to write letters to his teacher to challenge him. His own teachers doesn't believe him. he haven't started to search who the mc. I'm not gonna lie though the concept of a person unalive hero is interesting so I'm gonna stay
the first mistake in room of requirement. no normal kid should have knowledge of it just going near set of red flag to anybody(beside normal kids).the Marauder's map might be a good start for finding the hero. but I like the concept so just take this as me nagging
Sergeantgreen:I'm sorry to hear that you don't like the charakter but i can understand your reasoning. As this is my first novel i may be unable to always convey all thoughts and emotions of the charakter in a clear way, without acctually writining it down. i wanted to show and not tell how the charakter is and the charakter is a bit stupid or childish at the beginning. in his own world he lacked social contacts with people his own age and it is showing in his behavior. at the beginning he wanted to be like you probably wanted him to be. Someone with a great focus on the hero and he may even get back to that after two or three universes but now he is having friends and enemies (if you want to call ron that) for the first time. While struggling to find the hero, he also gets every day problems because he is unable to shut off all his emotions. He won't be someone that will kill without second thoughts. and i want to explore the emtional trauma that comes with that. as for the hero search itself, i would be interested in how you would start the search for the hero. maybe i missed something really obvious. (Some mistake Atlas made were intentional but maybe not all so please enlighten me)
I see we think alike. You will like the next few chapters. But the marauders map has one weakness. It doesn't tell you if the person is the hero or not. It just tells you where everyone is. It will be a topic in the coming chapters.
truedevil:the first mistake in room of requirement. no normal kid should have knowledge of it just going near set of red flag to anybody(beside normal kids).the Marauder's map might be a good start for finding the hero. but I like the concept so just take this as me nagging
yes that a good weakness but you can find out if a person is suspicious or not going to room that he or she shouldn't know about
Sergeantgreen:I see we think alike. You will like the next few chapters. But the marauders map has one weakness. It doesn't tell you if the person is the hero or not. It just tells you where everyone is. It will be a topic in the coming chapters.
truedevil:yes that a good weakness but you can find out if a person is suspicious or not going to room that he or she shouldn't know about