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Grammar is horrid, would suggest an editor or an app to help. Character introduction isn't very creative or original. There's alot of "he did this and then he did that and then he got this". Break it out and go into it. Restart the character introduction by developing his personality traits and try to make sense of why he would do certain actions, instead of "He got really successful by himself really fast because he did this and this and this, then he met his dad and got angry with his mum and kicked his dad". Why would a lonely guy who reincarnates into a fictional world and got the ability to learn at an accelerated rate and became a self made millionaire have issues with his current absent parents?

cobra kai: The Prodigy

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