Review Detail of SalmonFish in ORDER(dropped)

At ch7, and I really enjoy the effort the author has made with the writing; Glad to see something like this on webnovel, since I really enjoy the direction of the story. Though, there needs to be a tad more detailing in fight scenes and dialogue scenes, such as thought processes of characters, perspective in combat or interactions, or simply more physical detailing would help with the visualization. Also recommend the use of brackets for locations and more detailed information on how characters look, respond or react to certain situations. Though, for now, this is wonderful, keep it up!