Review Detail of Starparticle in The Mountain of the Alpha King

Shameful/less review here: I write daily, and I listen to feedback. I'm super interactive, and I enjoy connecting with others. I have reasons for each small detail, and lots of my plots have twists or pay-offs. This is absolutely one of them. I have carefully plotted out the story, and made sure it doesn't drag on forever. I also have other stories to weave into this one that will tell an entire picture through different characters in different places. This is only one of many many many stories in a series I've plotted out for different genres. This one just happens to focus on love, war, and how one can grow through tragedy instead of crumbling beneath its pressure. Please just read a few chapters, and you'll see what I mean. I have great characters - and I am sure there is one you'll grab onto. If not, you'll have the sincere thanks of a total stranger who really appreciated the fact you took the time out to just give me a chance! I'm small, and tiny - but I am filled with big surprises -- like a pork bun, or a deliciously crafted dumpling that hides so much flavor, you'll be glad you at least tried it!