Review Detail of Shaine_chan in THE MAFIA'S REVENGE

First of all, I'd like to say that I enjoyed how the story progressed. I just noticed in the first few chapters that I've read that the author loved using *smash* and *water splash*. And I think it would be best if you'd just describe it instead like for example, "She heard a loud sound that echoed in the four corners of the room". Second, the author needs to work on the proper use of punctuation. Avoid using too many "!" Lastly, the grammatical errors and typographical errors. So far I could say that the story has good potential. Keep working. You are doing a great job so far.