The story itself it is very interesting. The development of the worldd and the transitions in your book are quite well done. The only side note that i will have to add is that you make too many author notes. Let some things for people to think and interpret will be more interactive in their minds (I guess). As for the author, you have a lot of potential so keep up with the good work.
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