Although I assume it was sufficient I do believe there might have been more background information and perhaps even more emotions. Just because you use bad words doesn't imply they are truly mad. I must question if he returned to his planet in chapter 2. Does he not remember this, or is this a flashback? But other from that, I guess everything went OK.
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