Review Detail of MansonFD7 in EMBER (Reborn From Their Ashes)

Sorry for the late review because of my busy affairs. Unfortunately, I have to give this review a pretty low score. Because there are some issues I've encountered whilst reading the 2 chapter: 1. Too much useless info-dumps. 2. Sentences don't have any engagements. 3. And the sentences felt hard to read because it contained too much sticky words and redundancies. Maybe I reckon you to using the Prowritingaid free (in which are better than Grammarly) to fixing your slightly messed up chapter sentences. However, I will change my mind and delete this review if you insisted on conducting the overhaul of this novel. No need to change the whole storyline, just fix the sentences so it'll be easier to read. Thanks in advance.