Review Detail of 0Mashroom in Evolutionis Player[Eng]

first and foremost the story really does interest me however the writing is.... very shet, for one the grammars need some fixing, and what the hell are those long as s paragraphs, seriously make it short and clear, my phone fell from my face as I dose off reading in the early chapters. Characters let's just say too bland, can't even remember their names, or even have one, especially the Mc.