Review Detail of CallieLy in The present I got for writing a story

This is a promising story. There's a few things that can be improved in the writing quality, but the artful flow of the narrative is there. I like how the descriptions go beyond just telling, and smoothly weaves into introducing the character's emotions, personalities, and background. The MC seems to be set up with great opportunities for character development which is definitely something worth looking forward to. Keep writing!