The story is written nicely with no apparent grammatical, spelling or structural mistakes, kudos to the author for the hard work! The world background is complex but does not immediately appeal to me because I have no distinct plot to latch my talons onto. I suggest to stick to one main plotline and ensure that readers know where they are while reading the story. Side adventures should be mentioned in extras instead. Good luck!!!
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