Review Detail of Eseternal in Master of Dream

this is my first time ever write a novel, well I could not called this a novel. A story of a boy died then reincarnate to another world called Meto. in this world magic is possible and monster exist here, there are more mythical ang legendary monster live in Meto. our mc is a pervert but strong. he will fight strong monster and people. it will go to shool story. or maybe it will change, but my plan this will go to school story. even a work of a child please, stay until I end.