Review Detail of Lu_Shui in Your Sweet Presence

Hi Pearl! The story tells about two families : the Qian and the Bai family. The first 10 chapters mostly talk about the Bai family. I find the drama and interaction in both families engaging, but the constant switch between the stories should be avoided IMHO. Maybe start with the Qian family because the opening chapter was amazing, but then make one switch to the Bai family up until Qian Jin appears on TV. I hope things are improving for Qian Mu. Poor boy born to yet another despicable father. Please pay more attention to the capitalization and structure, do not rush with the plot. Otherwise you are doing very well. Good job!