The story looks over interesting and promising, I like the idea of Mr Smiley and his world domination. The world-building is amazing but I feel you could go into more depth when describing the character's appearances, me smiley was done perfectly but his fall maid was kind of not. Also grammar is good and no errors
MisterEnd0821
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