Review Detail of LucienNg in WHITE FEELINGS, BLACK HEART

I’ll do an honest review. The story itself isnt too bad; the plot has a lot of potential, actually. The pacing was well-thought too. However, there are grammatical as well as structural mistakes here and there. The idea of the story itself is unique, but a quick re-run on what you’ve written once in a while could really help! Overall, I understand that this is a new story that needs furthur editing and fixing, so I’ll give it a 4 for the idea. I believe your story has the potential to get out there, so don’t give up and keep writing author!