Review Detail of Chips_8019 in I am Dosu Kinuta in the naruto world!
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Concept was good. System wasn't implemented well felt very strange. He somehow knows things he shouldn't like spoilers, if he fuses sound waves into his leg he should be somehow 3-4 times faster? hardly if not no character development whatsoever so far for the mc. The author doesn't care to share his backstory or write action scenes in the exams unless he feels like it. spoilers! Author thinks that Kiba's clan is a noble clan which isn't true so i doubt the authors knowledge of the story. high potential certainly But ruined it very quickly. The author says his sound waves can do things quite impossible like somehow being able to use his sound abilities to turn all energy into sound? I wonder if the reviews actually read the novel not just fan girling over the idea of it which Again is a Interesting concept. Overall not worth reading unless the author edits his novel and fixes it. To author--if you want suggestions The biggest improvement you could make is to stop skipping over your own story like at very beginning where the mc just exists and just oh guess I'm here now and it goes from there not interesting at all. Though if fixed would definitely have a chance to be a solid fan fic. Sorry for long review just felt like sharing my thoughts.
I am Dosu Kinuta in the naruto world!
Marcelinho_Ggazeli
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I don't think I said anything about tenten more of just story plot and stuff? so beyond that I said his sound abilities you gave him should be quite impossible realistically which some readers won't like. It is a fan fiction so you can make his sound do whatever you want. I'm just pointing this out for others.
Marcelinho_Ggazeli:Clearly you are evaluating bass only because I said the obvious, that Tenten is weak, about the powers of sound, all the characters that control the sound can do that, just research, I'm using the fantasy sound power concept, and not our reality
The in inuzuka clan is not a noble as far as I know there are 4 noble clans which the inuzuka clan is not apart of I can't find anyone who says otherwise other than you. As for rating the clan myself I think it's ok nothing impressive decent tracking and that's about it.
Marcelinho_Ggazeli:By the way, I suggest you research about the noble clan, rate the Inuzuka clan, use any official Wiki
Marcelinho_Ggazeli:By the way, I suggest you research about the noble clan, rate the Inuzuka clan, use any official Wiki
Marcelinho_Ggazeli:By the way, I suggest you research about the noble clan, rate the Inuzuka clan, use any official Wiki
Remind me to not read anything written by you, you just start them and then drop. So when you see me in the comments just tell me to stop reading because it's getting dropped sooner or later. bye
Marcelinho_Ggazeli:Clearly you are evaluating bass only because I said the obvious, that Tenten is weak, about the powers of sound, all the characters that control the sound can do that, just research, I'm using the fantasy sound power concept, and not our reality