Grammar isn't the best, which is to be expected of a new story. But, my area of gripe is the fact that the MC is expressing emotions as an 'emotionless' character. You can't design a character with such a complex narrative and suggestion and completely disregard it. Interesting plot and amazing theoretical character design, but the execution is lukewarm and forgoes its meaning.
Nzr150cc
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giốngNzr150cc:Thanks for your opinion. It's true that my English is bad. I'll fix it in the future. And for other shortcomings. Please understand because this is my first novel. And I'm still learning. I'll try to make it even better.🙏