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I like it, but there are some things about it that I didn't like. I don't like how his personality changed. Batman's personality is what made him batman, he was cold and rarely shows emotions. Now if it was a little watered down from the transmigration then I get it, but you took it all away. I also dislike how you skipped some inportsbr parts that should've been showed. such as his TRAINING, this would of been an awesome insert to the story and show us how batman trains to get his body back in shape and his muscle memory to where it was. Then we have his first fight which was highly disappointing, "I threw a smoke grenade and got rid of 9 of them in less than a minute" ????? like bro, its batman, the best hand-to-hand fighter that there was and you don't include his moves or none of the takedowns!?! I've read more about technology, his schooling, his ideas for Wayne company, then I have fights, training, and actual detective work. Batman didn't always use his AI to do everything. He is not Ironman who has to rely on Jarvis for most of his daily life. Bruce Wayne is a bonafide detective, from finding clues that nobody would think of, could tell someone was lying with a glance, to many other things. I know this is more of a rant than actually help to how to better the story but I feel you could a lot with this which is why I was expecting that.
Marvel's Dark Knight
Ansur97
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Yes. I really messed up for few parts. But about the personality part. I chose to do it that way. last time he was alone. That is whay he is always cold. Now he has a sister. Then why should he be cold? Even in dc universe, when he is bruce wayne, not batman. He is not cold. He is cole only when he is alone & he is batman. I made him cold when he is Batman. Chapter 12 should show you that. & I am trying to imporve my writing. I will solve all the problems. But about his training. It is nothing new. That is why I didn't show anything. His new training will be more descriptive. Which I am going to do in chapter 14 maybe.
His personality he had and the way he chased girls when he was Bruce Waybe was all an act. It shows us this multiple times. His real personality is when he is Batman. I'm not saying he should he cold to his sister or Alfred but you could see he was nothing like batman when the 'FBI' showed up. Bruce Wayne would act arrogant and show no regard for them. Batman would go as far as to investigate them to see what S.H.I.E.L.D is and if they had any involvement into the kidnapping. There are problems with his personality too that are not good to have but that's what makes him who he is. Such as he is always suspicious about everybody and rarely trusts someone. I'd still rate the story with 5⭐! Can't wait till there's more chapter.
Ansur97:Yes. I really messed up for few parts. But about the personality part. I chose to do it that way. last time he was alone. That is whay he is always cold. Now he has a sister. Then why should he be cold? Even in dc universe, when he is bruce wayne, not batman. He is not cold. He is cole only when he is alone & he is batman. I made him cold when he is Batman. Chapter 12 should show you that. & I am trying to imporve my writing. I will solve all the problems. But about his training. It is nothing new. That is why I didn't show anything. His new training will be more descriptive. Which I am going to do in chapter 14 maybe.
Ok. Now for the SHIELD part you have to wait. I have plans for that. I have no plans for him working alone. It is never going to word. It never worked in gotham. And It will not work in Marvel. He is just one man. And criminals are everywhere. I can't even remember all the criminal organisation I have heard in just MCU movies. He cannot do it alone. He needs allies. He can't again create Justice League. It will not work here. Government in this world is more ruthless than DC world. Heck, they threw Nuclear Missile on the heart of New York. Where so many people were trapped. Just so that Chitauri can't pass the containment zone. It is not a government part like Amanda Waller was. It is the main government. That is why he needs allies. Through SHIELD he will get those allies. Although this is a spoiler. But it doesn't matter. Some little spoilers are good for some people's heart. And yes. he is suspicious of everyone. That is why his backup plans have backup plans.
readtokilltime:His personality he had and the way he chased girls when he was Bruce Waybe was all an act. It shows us this multiple times. His real personality is when he is Batman. I'm not saying he should he cold to his sister or Alfred but you could see he was nothing like batman when the 'FBI' showed up. Bruce Wayne would act arrogant and show no regard for them. Batman would go as far as to investigate them to see what S.H.I.E.L.D is and if they had any involvement into the kidnapping. There are problems with his personality too that are not good to have but that's what makes him who he is. Such as he is always suspicious about everybody and rarely trusts someone. I'd still rate the story with 5⭐! Can't wait till there's more chapter.
DC has way more criminal organizations and more villains than marvel. I'm pretty sure it's close to triple the amount Marvel has. Marvel world is more of light themed then the DC world also so I'd say it's more dangerous compared to Marvel world. It also has the more powerful villains. DC's Darkseid compared to Marvel's Thanos, then Darkseid is winning that fight everytime. But DC is only more dangerous if we're basing it off movies since marvel movies are the only ones that show planetary threat compared to the DC movies. Him teaming up with S.H.I.E.L.D could work, if he cleaned out Hydra from it, but I don't see him doing that in a relatively short time since how already out Hydra really is.
Ansur97:Ok. Now for the SHIELD part you have to wait. I have plans for that. I have no plans for him working alone. It is never going to word. It never worked in gotham. And It will not work in Marvel. He is just one man. And criminals are everywhere. I can't even remember all the criminal organisation I have heard in just MCU movies. He cannot do it alone. He needs allies. He can't again create Justice League. It will not work here. Government in this world is more ruthless than DC world. Heck, they threw Nuclear Missile on the heart of New York. Where so many people were trapped. Just so that Chitauri can't pass the containment zone. It is not a government part like Amanda Waller was. It is the main government. That is why he needs allies. Through SHIELD he will get those allies. Although this is a spoiler. But it doesn't matter. Some little spoilers are good for some people's heart. And yes. he is suspicious of everyone. That is why his backup plans have backup plans.
readtokilltime:DC has way more criminal organizations and more villains than marvel. I'm pretty sure it's close to triple the amount Marvel has. Marvel world is more of light themed then the DC world also so I'd say it's more dangerous compared to Marvel world. It also has the more powerful villains. DC's Darkseid compared to Marvel's Thanos, then Darkseid is winning that fight everytime. But DC is only more dangerous if we're basing it off movies since marvel movies are the only ones that show planetary threat compared to the DC movies. Him teaming up with S.H.I.E.L.D could work, if he cleaned out Hydra from it, but I don't see him doing that in a relatively short time since how already out Hydra really is.