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First of all, the synopsis is missing, so I have no idea what I'm going into. The story looks like it's based around Hindu Mythology. There are different terms mentioned in the narrative, which I think would be better if the characters or something else introduced this term. The paragraph are long, so you might want to break it. I liked the context you've given at the start of the story, but it also comes off as an info dump, which could be a bit boring to read. I also like the notes given to make the readers understand the terms. The story is relatively good in my opinion, but you should pay attention to grammar, and mainly the splitting of paragraph. And yeah, write the synopsis. Slowly improve yourself, and I hope it turns out to be a great novel.

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