Review Detail of Below_the_current in Pretty Idol Reincarnation System

Hi, here is my swap review. Before I start I just want to say that it's just my opinion and I don't mean to come across as offensive. Overall, the idea is great and really interesting. I do wanna say that I usually stay away from ABO books, but I love it when people take that trope and add a twist. So thank you, it's really nice when an author doesn't mess with the ABO lol. In terms of writing quality, it's really good. Though I do suggest going over it because there were some sentences that did not make sense or mixed up the tense. Also, just my opinion but you changed from third limited and third omniscient a lot. I don't know how to explain it properly. What I'm talking about is the camera/lenses that are used for us reader - so in a movie, for example, our camera lenses are the character that we're shown the perspectives from. Third limited is in a way like that only following one character or more - with this you see, feel, hear, everything that the character does and have no access to other characters thoughts and feelings except what the character you're following sees. Third omniscient is how most of the classical are written, where the narrator takes on a godly retelling of the story being able to jump from character to character and often coming across as someone telling the story from a distance. I know confusing lol. Just wanted to point it out in case you want to experiment with it and see what feels right with you. As for story development, I'm really enjoying it. Just be careful with pacing (i also have issues with that *crying inside*. It felt a bit slow, and things started happening from chapter 4 onwards. I would definitely recommend to review that and experiment with it because you might loose a lot of readers because of it. For character development. The main character's personality is the type that I really like to read about. But because the way the first chapter was done, I just didn't feel that connection to her. Which is weird, because logically speaking, I like her. So maybe just I don't know, use the first chapter to introduce her and highlight her good points - that increases her likeability which increases our sympathy and empathy. So for example, and it's just an example, you don't have to do this. You can introduce her arguing with her parents about her dream and show her saving the teenager. Just a suggestion. Experiment with what you feel is right for your main character. For world background, I appreciate that it wasn't dumped in the first chapter. Congrats on that! So many people make the mistake of just throwing info about the world at the reader. Also, idk but i felt it would be nicer if some of the info was introduced through people having conversations or something. Overall, like a said. Really well done. I can see that a lot of work went into it and it was executed well. Can I just say, omg good job with the foreshadowing. Now, I'm interested to meet the male lead. Wish you luck! Hope I wasn't too harsh.