Review Detail of nourhaffar3112 in Tales Of A Vengeful Fairy

I so love your story!! The plot is transcedent and the characters just as interesting!! I felt bad for the poor fairy! She is the only creature of her kind who doesn't possess magic, making people treat her with disdain, as if she's not a being who has feelings! They even try to kill her!!! The only people who care for her with love are her father, the king, and her brother. Unfortunately, those were harmed or killed by those who loathe the fairy! In the first chapter, I could feel everything flowing well. I was extremely interested in reading, since I enjoyed it, especially when the fairy's maiden came in rushing, her face in anguish. Afterwards, I started getting a little bored, since there were no mysteries and there were too many crowded dialogues. You revealed too much in the first couple chapters, leaving no room for suspense or mystery. The next chapters were full of dialogue with lesser explanations or the world around. I need to know about the world! Since too much was revealed, people would get bored and stop reading. You had a myriad of misssing punctuation leading to run-ons, as well wrong capitalization. Your dialogues need to be more ethical and interesting. Your repetitions and lack of various word choice makes the story lack in change. You also have some misplaces words. Some sentences are wordy by the way. The characters. I need to know how the characters look. The emotions that go around or in their heads. There were too many characters without illustratioms of their facade. The story was kind of fast-paced. Emotional incidents happen, which are part of the focus of the story, however, you don't keep them for long, don't describe what is exactly happening, moving on to the next thing immediately. Novels cannot be written without research. That is a rule.It is okay to search for information, synonyms/antonyms, aays to describe things, etc. Also, they are written in boring detail, literally, so give everything detail, unless it is not a main part of the story. If it isn't, write a thing or two about it, but if it is, then write eight or ten, it's ok. Not exactly, but it was just an example. Overall, I gave you five stars to encourage you to improve which will make your writing even more beautiful. This story is a great one, and the main character a person who is irrelatable; a satisfactory character. You are a talented writer who I am sure will become even better with improvement over time. I will support you all the way so please don't stop writing!! 💙💕 (Sorry for the bad review :<)