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I only read the first chapter and dropped it. There is too much mixture of powers, it will be a humorous fic where the mc is powerful, I do not need to go too far to find out, with only the first chapter you can see that there will be no drama, no romance, I am pretty sure there will be many lemons. The powers you have chosen have no synergy, beyond that they can be used, for example, you should have chosen, in addition yamato, the sword skill and technique sasaki kojiro (noble ghost) Tsubame Gaeshi, you basically asked for a lot of powers without synergy. Also, do you really want the kyubi? So that? what would be the point? Not to mention that there is no chakra in the spirit world, it cannot be used. I think I'm being unfair, it's probably a parody so it should be fine, your writing is readable, although it seems (though I'm only guided by the first chapter) the story is fast-paced.
bleach: the all powerful demon
jexishere
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i thank you for your review as for why he asked for all these powers it's more accurate he asked for powerful weapons my MC plans to use all of these weapons to create the perfect zanpakuto the fact there is no synergy while it may appear that way is false which is why the total concentration breathing is there also you cannot say there is no romance based off a single chapter i have big plans for a romance specifically with rukia as for the kyubi it is the catalyst the embodiement of his zanpakuto that's why he asked for it and since the kyubi is chakra itself giving the MC access to it more specifically so he can use the multi shadow clone technique also the mixture of powers is the point this story is what would most likely happen if the MC was an otaku who got to pick what powers he wanted this is after all a complete rewrite of my previous story which i admit was terrible give me a chance before you jump to conclusions please also yes my story is a little fast paced i am not one who likes to read filler and wants to get to the meat of the story that doesn't mean i won't have chapters designed for character building that will be there as well my writing style has definitely changed since i started but thanks again for the review