Review Detail of kcurrierk14 in Vampire Brothers

I lost interest after a few chapters I like where this story is heading and I liked that the writer just dove head first into the madness of it all but ari needs a back story and she needs to have more resistant to this unless she is used to the supernatural she should be more frightened and less taken with the brothers she needs to slowly fall in love with Luke and Liam needs to be more of a bad for her to choose luke I have only dabbled in writing here and there I could never get past 3 chapters so I applaud you this is one of my fantasies i used to dream of when I was 12