Review Detail of MarcoDao in 'The One Punch Girl' In Nine Deadly Realms

It's not bad of a story, the author has a lot of chapters written which is very commendable I believe. The major issue I have though is that there's not much in the way of decent sentence construction or punctuation making the reading experience very messy. I'm sure English is not the author's first language so I'd recommend him to get someone to help him edit before publishing. Other than that: your premise is good, but it relies too much on me knowing comic books and Anime references of which I only know about half of those things. I'd suggest that you make an original character/villain or two and maybe explain how all the universes appeared in this earth (unless I missed a chapter or two then don't worry about this). Otherwise yeah