The dialogue between characters is so flat. Other characters are so one dimensional that it's ridiculous. Having the characters respond back without any emotion doesn't help. (You need to use question marks to end sentences that are questions. Without doing that, it really throws off the flow of the story.) I hope you work on your character development as I like the plot of the story.
AidenCanis
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