I failed my high school essay so bear with me. The story is adventure and action story with both western fantasy and eastern fantasy elements. There will be magic and cultivation to make character ability more diverse. I want the action to more than just who has the bigger sword. The main Character will be overpowered but it will take a while for that. His opponents will also be very overpowered.

Good story, a constructive critique would be to make a schedule of releases and to stick to it. As for the story itself, it has great potential, I love the mix of western and eastern factors that appeal to a big audience. The strong suit of this story is definitely the world building which feels big and full of life. If you like to read fantasy, give this story a shot.

I think you do a good job in mixing western and eastern fantasy (I'm a sucker for fantasy). The story and world building also seem to progress at a steady pace. However, you have some glaring grammatical issues which appear odd because you possess a rich vocabulary (you can try using Grammarly to fix some of those). As long as you can fix those issues, I believe your writing will become outstanding. Lastly, stretching the prologue across several chapters is, in my humble opinion, something you should try to avoid as it can frustrate the readers and feel like you're dragging the story. As for the story itself, for now, I can't say much about it since I'm only in the sixth chapter, but if the prologue is any indication, it should be quite interesting. Best of luck to you!

I like it a lot. There world is very interesting and it doesn't feel like a copy paste like many novles. The update is way too slow for it to get popular. The grammar also need some work.

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Hello, here is Fro~~! To be honest, it is still to early to give review since there was only a prologue in the story. And Im not quiet understand what has happening in the prologue. But since I promised, I will try my best to review your story. Writing quality : narrative description is good and easy to read. But there are a lot of typos and grammar mistakes. I put some comments in the chapters, you can check them. You also mixed the tenses, present tense and past tense are misplaced, better use one of them instead mixing. Story development : since there was only prologue, I will review them. There are many character that appeared on the prologue, but because of vague description, I felt like a bystander instead entering the story. Almost all character are neutral in the prologue, so I dont know which ones was more important. You didnt explain clearly what purpose the woman attack the god's cell for, and I can only vaguely comprehend, it was for releasing etheral king? I thought it would be for appearance of MC (etheral king), but then the last mysterious figure that appeared threw my guess away. Then I realized I didnt quiet understand what has happening after all haha 😅 Character design : it is still early, so all character hasnt quiet show their appearance, I didnt even know which one the MC hahah. Need to flesh out the character more. World building : I guess, it is a good enough for prologue, since there was no need too much of explanation of world building in the prologue. At least I understand the world description. Well, it is still early to say, this story is great or not, but the prologue is interesting enough to make reader curious. This story has good potential, just need to improve the grammar and reduce the typos. Keep the hard work, ruen!!