Review Detail of KRISS_H in A Rattling Monster [Completed] (Editing in Progress)

Feels unnecessarily stretched in places. The author could also use an editor.. or even just a proof reader. Overall I found the read an enjoyable one and was vaguely addicted to the premise. However... that ending... after all of that build up has me choking a bit on rage. Am genuinely interested in seeing what else he's come up with.