Zeno
I am mysterious
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unless that part is changed
No, it is clearly shown that Hancock's fruit was given by a celestial dragon already in Mariejois,
30 too many, maximum of 20 years, is more acceptable, in that time it is enough for Hankok to fall in love with the MC and the deal is as if it never happened in itself
one more is missing, I would recommend editing these parts and putting an oc, since the position of admiral should never be empty, and on top of that it is illogical that there is no candidate for admiral
????, roger????, edit!!, the rocks information was deleted!
edit, mc is 15 and robin is 11
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Hello, there is a Chinese one piece fanfiction just like this one, are you translating it or are you just taking the main idea of the MC's monstrous talent, and are you going to make the corresponding changes to make it your own story?, since that fanfiction is outdated compared to to the knowledge we have today and it would not make much sense to translate it.
It's wrong, it's good that it's the North Sea, but they shouldn't know the categories of the zoan, at most they should say that it is a rare flying type zoan.
another admiral is missing, you can put an "oc", the 3 admiral positions must always be full. edit
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Why does he call them ncp if he knows they are real now?
The chapter seems chunnibi, it is almost the same as the original novel, disappointing, a thousand times better it would have been if his creation Lumi defeated them, being an original fight, in the blink of an eye the entire army annihilated, and only the leaders alive for experiments.
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The Lucifer part is unnecessary, in addition, giving your full name in the future could be disadvantageous, since currently the MC would be a god in that world, but if in the future he goes to outer space to explore the planet, we don't know what he will find, There may be magical civilizations that have name assassin magic, death note type, etc.