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Lonely_and_quiet

Lonely_and_quiet

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2024-05-12 đã tham giaUnited Kingdom
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  • Lonely_and_quiet
    Lonely_and_quiet7 months ago
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    Hello author. I tried reading the first 10 chapters but eventually gave up. just my personal opinion but I recommend that you rewrite the starting chapters. The reason why is because the same thing was said multiple times but in different ways. Why would I want to read about the same thing twice? I get that because of the constant time skips, you have to reassure the reader that "the mc has yet to change" but it felt strenuous to read and I wasn't told anything new. Also the world building. You introduced us to the crumbled and war-torn city early on but it wasn't until after a few chapters that I was told that there was an actual group of people living together. Maybe I missed it but there was no explanation for how the (camp?) looked like. These were just my thoughts and a writer can never cater to everyone so I understand if it was just me that prefers a different style of storytelling.