Fantastic_Rayan_04

use " " when writing dialogs and Pov to provide a better understanding

Volantis

*Riverland

*how intead of hoe

As Man of same religion I understand that . Congratulations 🎊 on Raksha Bandhan hope you prepared a good gift for your sister 😁

Bro I don't know if I'm correct but most probably Deneres was the price that was promised As in valarian price and princess both sound the same. I thought you should know as if this can chage the plot in your novel as you many chapters in pateron

I thought Max would walk Pepper down the aile

one dozen

While Base of the Novel is good and story development is good. The MC is too cowardly and fears to be called a pirate. If I remember right in the novel you mentioned that MC has secne till Egg Head as he was searching for Elders Devil Fruits in the System Shop. If so why is being pus**. While I think the pricing is not well done I can't say anything as you might have it related to the plot of the novel. I have bit advice write the chapter titles instead of no. and a small synopsis will do a lot of good believe me. Overall Its a good novel, Had good start, Plor also seems nice enough, Writing is also good the only exception is MC cowardlyness. Anyway Good Luck I was the first one here and will be last one to be here even if the story goes good or bad I will be with you till end and support you my daily PS and don't let other please negative comments bother you if they criticize you take as lesson to improve.

*ship not island