J_D_Johnathan

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Hello guys(and ladies). I am Author-kun, or Immortal-kun as I liked to call myself. I am just another random dude trying to make up the best stories he could come up with. IMMORTAL-KUN OUT

2023-10-20 đã tham giaGlobal

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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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This chapter... seems rushed. The sentences that should be separated were yet again, actions and thoughts should be separated into different sentences. Not to mention, the pov doesn't really include all the things it should have, the emotion and awareness is missing, while including things that should be used in a 3rd person pov like the intensity of the pain, etc. Honestly, All in all, 4.9/10 for this one, sorry. That's all for now.
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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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with pleasure
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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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what's there to see?
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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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why are you still this calm? THE DAMN BUILDING IS ABOUT TO COLLAPSE AND MANY WILL DIE
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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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classic
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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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bruh
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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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Hmm, should separate thoughts from actions ngl
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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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plot
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J_D_Johnathan5 months ago
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shit, almost wrote a paragraph here
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Tensura: Chronicles of the Star-King

Two thousand years have passed since the Creator God, Veldanava, died and refused to reincarnate. At least, that's what everyone believes. But what if he couldn't reincarnate at the time, and what if he's only just now coming back? And what if he's manifested again on the outskirts of Rimuru City, in the domain of the Newbie, True Demon Lord Rimuru? What will happen when the world finds out about his return? What will happen he the Destroyer meets her long dead father?

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Ascendance as an Angel

After tragically dying in an accident, Malek is reunited with his girlfriend in the afterlife, who reveals her origin as the daughter of the God who created their world. With her assistance, Malek is given a second chance as a Warrior Angel. Join Malek in his rise to become a Seraphim or maybe something even greater? ------------------------------------------------------ Discord Link: https://discord.gg/gTRyPpyyAT

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Tensura: Path beyond Godhood

Izuku Midoriya finds himself in a pickle, being framed and betrayed by the very people he trusted, his naive inner hero dies, But what if he finds out that he was never a human in the first place? But rather a being even the Gods worshipped. Will he take revenge on those who had wronged him, or will he just live an eventful life in the world of a unusual Slime? [NOTE: THIS IS A DRAFT FOR THE SAME STORY I WILL POST LATER ON WATTPAD, SO ANY SUGGESTIONS ARE WELCOME SINCE I WILL BE ADDING NEW ELEMENTS AS WELL AS SCENES AND BENDING THE PLOT A BIT IN THE OFFICIAL RELEASE] {Note: This is kind of a rewrite of my earlier story "I died but became an OP God in my Favorite Novel" from Wattpad(I recommend reading my stories from there), so many things will be similar. Also, this series is going to actually start somewhere in 2024 so please be patient since I cannot do much right now. You can read my previous story to get a basic hint of how the story is going to be along with the trailer.}

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