i apologize for how long it took me to respond!1) my book is about to continue being posted, but it might be a little different from before

hi author! the storytelling is quite good, and so is the pacing! I do like this book a lot c:!!! keep up the pacing author!

Wow... this book is goodgotta say, the story is fast. so I should warn you, buckle up. it snatched my interest a bit too quickly, and I couldn't put it down until the first 5 chapters. so far, evedything is great! keep qeiting author nim!!

if it cant be put in a pocket im sad

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system novels are quite common, but this one is definitely unique! i like yhe characters so far! keep going author nim!!!

so far, everything is looking good for this story. i love the emotional narrator! very good!

oh? alright! username- dreamscraper

the dtory is very good so far. Also ver inreredting, and surprisingly well written

it gets confusing to even those outside the US

surprisingly, this book dragged a lot more than the firdt chapter. even tho i know stuff happened, i feel like nothing important did. try to make the convo with holmes more interesting

this isnt realistic dialogue

dont say tom do much. it gets repetitive

*helpless

writing your main character as 'hopeless' doesnt make people thjnk ur chsrscter is. show or describe. font tell

use " anf not '. Readers won't knoe if its thoughts or actual words

this is kinda better. but once sgain. you're judt explaining. its not going to hook anyone

first chapter was boring and srsgged even though it was short. try to fix that

too many descriptdion make the story drag

show dont tell