Hi! I'm Kayden and i like to write stories. i also like to draw. My book, "Portals in the water", "I'm writing with my friend Aster :)
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I quite enjoyed your story, and I cant wait to read the next chapter. I really like this though I think you should pace it a little slower, and show us some of your world, describe it and it's characters. For example, when the devil reached out to the main character, I had no idea where he was. But other than that great story! (Also this is just my thoughts and I'm not a professional so idk just hope this helps)
I don't really know how to give constructive criticism, but all I can say is that I liked this chapter. and a tip I have is to read back over your story a few times and make edits before you post it :) (idk if you do this already its just a tip that I use when I write)