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CarlosDr3vna

CarlosDr3vna

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2023-06-14 đã tham giaGlobal
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna1d
    trả lời Lucinda_Hacker

    I've rewritten this a number of times because I could never hammer down what I wanted. This is the official and final product. 😅

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    NameLess'
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna9d
    trả lời DaoistyQNGiX

    Maybe. I'd hardly call it a mess. I've read way worse on this app. My story has plot, direction, decent writing and grammar, and decent world building. I'm not saying it's the second coming of christ, but I am saying that it's worth reading. Especially considering the garbage novels that are usually on Webnovel.

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    ColorLess (Black Clover Fanfic)
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna13d
    trả lời Lord_Disaster

    Also yes. The original novel of NameLess, the novel my characters are from, is technically a harem. So, this one isn't too far from it.

    Ch 7 Battle On The Water (1/2) (7/35)
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna13d
    trả lời BlanKing

    They go to the World of Black Clover. 99.99% have never read NameLess and most of them probably never will. Me putting the Prologue is just insurance. But yes, after the Prologue (it'll only last 6 days since I'm uploading 6 chaps a day), they'll be transported.

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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna13d
    trả lời Lord_Disaster

    Just Jak. But Mako and another character also get transported to Black Clover. Hence why I wanted the backstory

    Ch 7 Battle On The Water (1/2) (7/35)
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna13d
    trả lời ArdaPendragon

    6 a day for the Prologue until it's finished

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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna14d
    trả lời Scarface3699

    No. I got you. And I understand. I just like to flesh things out when I make stories. That's how I've always done things.

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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna14d
    trả lời Scarface3699

    The 35 chapters establish a LOT of information without having to rely too much on info dumps. Otherwise, due to the nature of them in their previous world and the nature of the plot I have planned, there would be a LOT of text describing and dumping. In the way I have it set up, showcasing the events leading up to their Isekai is beneficial in establishing everything. ESPECIALLY since it's a long-running novel. Context matters, and so do the establishing of my key players (Jak Yanda, Mako Kunzite, and Meru). I don't have to set up the world of Black Clover since it already exists but since I'll be bringing over aspects of the MCs original world to add some plot and extra oomph, it's needed. Everything I do is for a reason.

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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna14d
    trả lời Scarface3699

    Yes, it's 35 chapters. However, I like building my characters and explaining things. Throwing characters from another world into a world without any buildup is weird to me. It's not going to be for everybody but that's fine. I'm confident in my own writing, writing quality, story, etc. The story is definitely worth giving a chance despite the Prologue length. Just look at how well FrostBitten did with other readers.

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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna25d
    bình luận

    What preparation? Sam hasn't prepared for ANY of the eventualities happening to him. Heck, if he was truly scared, he'd just switch to homeschooling or transfer schools.

    Sam couldn't hear these buzzing voices anymore. He knew he was a step too late compared to his preparation; Angel's was evidently more thorough. 
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna25d
    bình luận

    Yeah. Pick up the random flowers on a subway. Amazing move. 10/10 survival.

    Sam picked up the bouquet, its appearance igniting an awareness within him. This must be part of the system's functionality, which he hadn't fully understood yet.
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna25d
    bình luận

    Smart man 👏

    Thus, without hesitation, Sam chose safety.
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna25d
    bình luận

    Roll Credits

    To his surprise, it was a legendary dating game, and an adult version at that! The game's title was "The Female Leads Truly Loves You."
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna29d
    trả lời Saune_Sunsword

    This has been a running theme since the beginning of the novel.

    Reading through the description of the skill, Talon could only hold his breath in surprise. 
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna29d
    bình luận
    "Ugh! My leg!!" Cursing loudly, Shin-Il quickly dragged himself through the dirt as he tried to stand up again. However, he didn't have the time or the strength to do that. After running for 20 minutes non-stop, he was totally spent.
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna29d
    bình luận

    "Pale even harder" made me laugh a little. "Turn even paler" is the correct version of this but it's funny enough to ignore 😄.

    Inside this place, a young man could be seen running with a terrified look on his face. He kept looking back at whatever was following him, each time he took a glance at it, his face would pale even harder and the terror he was feeling would amplify.
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna29d
    bình luận

    *and then quickly dash towards it It was very janky reading this paragraph. This would probably flow better? Also, don't come at me. Trying to be of help as a fellow author. Cheers 🍻

    Luckily, since the voice came from a relatively close location, he was able to find it and then he quickly dashed toward it as fast as he could.
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna1mth
    trả lời Frost_Bite8

    But the weight of an unconscious body and the time taken to pull it off.......yeah. It's not that big of a deal. Doesn't affect the plot so 🤷 we keep moving.

    'This should work or I'm dead!!' With clenched teeth, he immediately threw himself forward. At the same time, a gigantic rock fell down right on the entrance.
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna1mth
    bình luận

    So.....he had enough time to not only throw her but also throw himself, but not enough to just run out the building......

    'This should work or I'm dead!!' With clenched teeth, he immediately threw himself forward. At the same time, a gigantic rock fell down right on the entrance.
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  • CarlosDr3vna
    CarlosDr3vna1mth
    bình luận

    The "bodies off" feels a little janky here. Maybe something synonymous with the phrase would fit better?

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