Ethan_Verdier_6345

Great shoe taste author

See this! I just gifted the story: Pizza

Author knows why . Fix your chapters before uploading.

It starts off great, author incorporates some interesting themes that you don’t normally see in novels these days. MC doesn’t automatically just get a new life and forgets all his past trauma, he actually recognizes he’s still fragile despite having a system now. Where I will comment is that the pace is pretty slow, 3-4 chapters of side character story just so we can know why the MC made a move 5 chapters ago is a bit much especially with a novel that doesn’t have a 100 chaps and barely any real interest has been generated for MC and his main harem for us to care about side characters . Other things would need some work too, such as actual character descriptions , better explanation with MC skills and at least even seein the system more in action since that is what supposedly is helping him with all this power. All in all needs work and I should of waited further down before unlocking 😅

MC is stupid, story makes no real progress in the first 10 chapters and outside of MC training no world building or character development has taken place.

This is ridiculously stupid to be honest. Like the MC makes no attempt at anything else? With 0 in all other stats??

That’s considered tall? lol

Great start to the novel, I’m really interested to see where the author takes us

How?

See this! I just gifted the story: Ice cola