swear the omake's are longer than the chapters themselves

the grammar is just so bad that i cant continue it, cant think of what else to say other than the grammar just ruins the entire story.

anyone else getting bored of the story, it started off so good but recently just doesn't hit the same.

sounds good! ill start putting the stones in the story :) i usually just use them randomly but this story seems interesting so ill start putting them here and we'll see where it goes.

sheesh, are you planning to write all of them, and how often do you plan to post?

pretty good story so far looking forward to how it turns out. Also wondering how many chapters are on the original?

fairy tail

would have liked it better if it wasn't the Naruto system it honestly just seems lame to me, maybe its just me but with the unique premise of him starting in impel down i feel like the story could be way better. might come check out the story some other time and see if you can somehow make the story turn out good.

why could this not come later hes only 11 should have done some journeying and then the kindombuilding

i understand that but just feels like at least to me that everyone knows how to do this and feels almost unimpressive don't know how else to describe it, i like the story but somewhere towards the later chapters just feels wrong and i don't know what it is.

why does it feel like everyone in this story is a professional builder of something

hope Hailey isn't the pairing at least how she is now

great story so glad the mc isn't some genius in everything from movie star, rock star, Olympic athlete. its nice that he's focused on once niche thing and is improving it and being somewhat more realistic.

well then ill wait for that, really liked the story in the beginning.

dont understand anything about this world waiting till he moves to somewhere else getting bored of this.

got to chapter 300 and he ended up having kids idk why but when the mc has kids it just completly ruins the story for me from that point on some people might like it but not for me his relationship was alright went fron the love interest being in 1 or 2 chapters skip 50 or so and then another 1 or 2 then there married and have kids. she has a nice introduction but again not enough to where i could get connected at all still until all that was a great story liked the character and world building. (dropped at chapter 300)

gets boring after the later 100+ chapters becomes repetitive blackmail here blackmail there. fall in love, sex repeat every couple chapters. the fights are not entertaining, lemons are boring. dropped at 186 after skipping a couple chapters because of boredom. only cool part of this story is the eyes but that was it. would have been better if he didt have a pokemon harem and only focused on the ice queen, elf queen and first 2 girls, maybe focus on 1 or 2 more but instead its a new girl after the other and then forget about the other girls right after.

dont drop this

got boring real quick, the whole story is way to fast paste while the story moves along there is no real description of certain points. Example mc says were going to (this place) and (doing this) and then says something like but i already know how it to get past everything with precog or whatever like the premise of the story but like i said to fast and moves in to many directions at once that it gets annoying to read

good story really liked it