Ty

I will try and your intution is right it is my first book and as english is not my daily use language it is very difficult to make it fun to read

Vol-1-What if Ash(pokemon mc) is an isekai mcVol-2:- what if pokemon looked liked humans

This is too similar to pokemon its likeWhat if Ash(pokemon mc)will be pervert and got a new life

Not going give any criticism, you are doing good mate keep it up and try to avoid mind cnotrol because it doesn't gives any suspense or risk like everything can be done my mind control. And good to see an indian fellow as here nobody reads or writes novel

Thannks for the chapter

Are you indian? Beacause in india no one read novel ,so it is nice to see a fellow indian writer

Thanks for the Chapter

I think buff effectiveness would became half and he can't get the limelight making it imposaible to win the hearts of heroines

Is this novel not have mc pov because i really liked the concept but i hate narrator pov

can you give an honest opinion on my novel too i first time writed a chapter so i want to know all my mistakes

no prob

liked it as a new author, but i think it is not that attracting, can't feel the urge to read more. same prob with my novel i also written first chapter today and i am unable to make attracting,can you give it a try for this shameless person

Author shameless review:- its my first work and tried to form a story with a nice story and many peoples will think of it as a child story but it s not a child story wait 30 chapters

amazing world building, excellent writing in First 5,6 volume but after that there are ups and down that make you stop reading and only if the number of harem is 3 or 4 like at the start ,it can be my favourite novel with the world building but now it is waste of such great world building when half of chapter are smut with the 31 women and if there are only 3 like the title says then there can we great romantic development.