Hello! I am Mikezilla; I've written Yggdrasil Dungeon Master, Overlord of Tensura, and most recently Kiyomi's Passage In Aiona, I'm inspired by my D&D GM days from 2017+, I do writing as a hobby.
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I took awhile to respond, but I agree with most of this when re-reading my own story. Definitely a fair amount of plot holes, and I could’ve handled it better; hopefully I’ll improve as I write more :) Thanks for your criticism, and I hope I see more criticism from people like you cause it is helpful.
I welcome you back as well! I hope you enjoy re-reading, I plan to start releasing a bit more as I’m not worried much about plot anymore haha.
He Actually does the same thing during Shaltear's combat scene (PvE) in the light novels + anime. The reason he cast Greater Magic Seal, is so that he could use Greater Teleportation later on when he needs it instantly.
He has! - Though I wish it were a more spectacular chapter for my return, steady goes the ship.
The real world has me captive! Yet, the pen has returned to the paper.
Sorry xd I just don't have much motivation to work on this story. There’s a ton of stuff wrong with my old writing and I do need to go back and correct it. That being said I’m also working on a new story which is another overlord crossover but in a more original setting.
From what I've read in Reincarnated as a Sword LN 1-4 slavery was/is illegal. (Unless I'm dumb and don't remember a section)
Hm... I don't know! I'm a bit out of Mana right now.
Ah nothing will happen to our cute cat-girl... It's all gonna be friendship & rainbows.
Thanks for amazing review! :D Honestly I thought having a bit of "Torture" & "Slavery" was a bit dark. Although this is still the beginning stages of the story and arc one is getting closer & closer to being wrapped up. Soon there will be a lot more dark chapters but not insanely dark just a few massacre scenes, slavery scenes etc. I can't spoil much but hopefully that'll increase the dark aspect of the storyline, after Mutonki we'll see the exit of the "saves heroine trope" or at least a reduction as I get into the grit of the story. Besides that I hope you continue to enjoy the story! If you ever have any complaints or see any errors don't feel afraid to leave a comment on the paragraph.