victoriarogue

Sure! I would love to. Thank you for your response. I might not be able to get to it this weekend, but I should have another chapter ready by next week. If you can wait until then, you should have something new waiting for you.

This story has been cross-posted from FFN, but it's received largely positive reception over the years. It is an older fiction. I have been told that there were little nuances here and there that needed tweaking, but not much passed that. This story follows after the end of Hellsing Ultimate. A group called the Red Scare III is actually trying to expose the existence of vampires en masse instead of hiding it like before. Integra and her crew are trying to deal with this new group but are having trouble tracking down the pattern of these large-scale attacks. She doesn't want to send Alucard prematurely, given his new powers, but she can't send Seras because of the new vampire-hunting technology being used. It's a stalemate in a sense. This story should be a fun read for you. It's worth giving it a go!

This was originally meant to be a short story about an original character and Portgas D. Ace. It's by no means a perfect piece of fiction as it does have flaws in referencing canon characters and events, but this story was meant to include the world and responsibilities of the privateers, which was a group of pirates that served their respective countries in the navy and legally were able to perform acts of piracy as long as they had what Oda calls the Enemy Ship Capture Warrant. This document was originally known as the Letter of Marque, and I believe Oda was using the Seven Warlords of the Sea as a reference to the privateers. There are similarities, but I found it odd how Oda handled the privateers, especially Jean Lafitte, so I took on this particular project to explain how unique these people actually were. Obviously, this is also One Piece - the slap-em-up shounen anime - so we have to give the privateers either Devil Fruit powers or some kind of unique set of abilities. I do that largely during the political portions of this story. Unfortunately, I refrained from including those bits here because of the lack of feedback, but this story has grown elsewhere so I will start rewriting fuller episodes in the future. I just wanted to be upfront and honest about what you're getting in to. The first three to four chapters are politically involved in part, but it gets less and less politically active after that. The bonus chapters have a bit more, but it's not ground-breaking. I think you'll still be able to enjoy it regardless, but I wanted to at least warn you that it's not revolutionary. It's more or less "cute".

I don't know if the white lead was meant to be worth more than silver, but I have the privateers dealing with known resources on the trade routes that existed during the Golden Age of Piracy (1690 - 1730). My story does have inaccuracies with its lore/canonical references, but I do intend to rewrite my errors in favor of cleanliness and better story flow.

To be fair and honest, I used the reviews from other platforms to score the first season of this story. As the author, I would be too biased to judge my own work, but this work has been posted elsewhere and others have enjoyed it and graded it as B-/C overall. So, I would say use your discretion wisely when reading this. I didn't write this with the hope of being a renowned web novelist. This story (in another 25 days) will be 13 years old. I really don't care about that title with a fiction story this old. My main focus was to create a spinoff for Sesshomaru's character that I would like to see onscreen and potentially be almost obsessed with. What would really just HIT HOME for me and make me go "Damn... Takahashi is in her BAG"? You do have Yashahime to enjoy if you like that sequel, so I'm not demanding you read anything of mine. I'm not offended by your choice. I, personally, didn't like that sequel, so I grinded in creating this world and story for Sesshomaru while keeping Yashahime's lore/story in mind. Season 1(Chapters 1 - 75) is mainly about Sesshomaru's new rival, Meioshi Jigoku, and how she becomes his ally when the Meido Stone is stolen by Lady Rakuyama, the ice titan of hell. Different Asian cultures are involved in this mythological tale as Lady Rakuyama's character design is based on Thai royalty and the House of Inu is a fusion of Chinese and Japanese cultures. You will see historical references to real-life events that are and were disturbing, but it's not the crux of the whole story. It's just a theme within an arc. If you can't stomach elements like child abuse or slavery, I totally understand and wouldn't recommend you read passed Chapter 49. It progressively gets more graphic as the story continues, but those elements discontinue around Season 3 in favor of Sesshomaru's romantic involvement with Meioshi. This is still based on Takahashi's work, so romance will be involved along with epic battles because it's Sesshomaru. Can't have him in here not fighting! 😂 Now, one reviewer didn't like the first rival fight between Sesshomaru and Meioshi, so I would be advised and proceed with caution on that. I'm not here to lie to you and say "Oh, my story is the best - !" Nah. This is flawed. Because Sesshomaru is a True Inu by the end of Inuyasha, I had to create enemies/bosses on his level or stronger. It took some serious research, but his lineup is set. I think that's it for me, so I will see you all again next time when Season 2 is finished. Hopefully, this story is enjoyable for you, but if it ain't. Oh well.

AYO! 🤣

No, he just ages PAINFULLY SLOWLY... 😂 Takahashi never really made the aging process clear for youkai, but your assumption wouldn't be that far off. He'll outlive several generations of humans.

Your welcome. 😁👍 I don't know if this will help, but try to think about what YOU would want to know about your characters. What quirks, beliefs, or nervous habits do your characters have that would pull you in. Looking at things from a reader's perspective often helps gain an exterior eye for what you have. If you have a character that maybe pulls the dry skin off their lips when they're nervous, you can use that to explain what makes them nervous and craft situations where they both enact this behavior and overcome it. Hopefully, that makes sense. I look forward to seeing your improvements in the future.

I think your story has potential. The main thing I'm noticing is that it's very "snapshot." It sort of reminds me of the storyboard sessions I used to participate in for comic art class. You state the character's name and basic info just so the team knows what to build on, but that's it. There's no sense of who the character is when it's snapshot writing. It's just one quick event after the other. I think had you expanded on your main character just a tad more, her introduction would have been more effective and gripping. However, if that's not your focus and you prefer to expand on the cultivation aspect and world building, then I would disregard this comment and continue working on what your main focus is going to be. Liu Mei's artwork was very well done, by the way. I love the blue aesthetic! <3

I'm not sure how to reply to this one effectively, but I will say "too soon" as in you're judging things too early. Sesshomaru's not using his full strength in the first fight. He's testing Meioshi's strength at surface level. He's not supposed to go "all-out" this early in this series; otherwise, we'd both be bored and there'd be no point to this. Without the sequel's inclusion, if you're thinking how I'm thinking, he would need a compelling reason to fight given his new god-tier level of strength. I will consider your review, however, because I might not have made the results of the fight in Chapter 10 clear enough if you think Sesshomaru lost. Meioshi doesn't beat him in the fight. The fight was unfinished. What's probably annoying you more is her catching him off guard. Which is good news! You're thinking like him. He SHOULD be able to beat her easily, so why didn't he? What's hiding beneath the surface? Regardless of all of this, I would like to thank you for your engagement. At the very least, your honesty is appreciated. I don't get much feedback, and the feedback that I do get is from some troll. Not exactly what I'm looking for in a constructive criticism but what can you do? However, if you find this story isn't your "cup of tea", I won't be mad if you decide to discontinue reading in the future. Thank you for your feedback once again, though! Cheers!