Kamon772

Would you like to read and possibly review one of mine in return?

Might I ask what about my narratives and descriptions needs work.

Rather interesting start to the story overall as their also seem to be a story with the story itself. Like how in the first chapter rather then starting off with the who seem to be the actual main character, you start off with someone else that seem like they are rather important to the plot and main character might have the strength to deal with them. However they were lacking the power to do so. Would be interesting to see a round two where the main character has both the strength and the power(I view strength kind of as a mere aspect of one's power)

Nice chapter that shows off how the world is now compare to how it was when Garmond recall. Possibly the world was like this along and he just was not aware of it. That being because his presence prevent his area from becoming this way at least fully

The mystery of this new world seems to be getting deeper

Interesting outcome of events

Interesting twist of who the story seems to be about. At first it does seem like its about Azazel. Though Garmond always seem like an important character from the start as well

Interesting fighting of two powerful guys. Whose powers vary along with how they view and use them

Thanks for the review

A rather interesting story with an interesting premise and set up to go with it. The scenario featured so far seems to building up to number of things. With gaps between chapters that can used to example or reveal what happened during them later on