Weaving_That

It's good for having a good time, but it falls short in many ways. The writing is very erratic. It constantly switches from first person to third person or worse, a combination of both. The characters behave in strange ways, it seems like they are all either completely against or completely in favor of the protagonist, there are never any gray areas. The protagonist is also strange. She always seems to apply morality to whatever suits her at the moment. He kills dozens of knights for invading, but then mourns the death of a couple of elves. Power levels are also in flux. Finally, I think the novel doesn't do a lot of the things it wants to do very well. There are basically no fights, the system basically doesn't exist. She has no problem running the kingdom where everyone adores her. Politics are very superficial. Then you have the merchant subplot. In short, it's fun, but you have to turn off your brain a little if you're even remotely critical.

With all of Hitomi's technology and resources, this whole chase scene felt really stupid. If the protagonist were someone who didn't like killing, I'd understand, but considering she hadn't hesitated to kill anyone before this, I don't understand why she didn't just blow everything up with a bunch of missiles. Or just immediately kill the driver as soon as she caught up with the van. The worst part is that she ended up killing everyone anyway, so the whole chase was totally pointless.

Fun. I like history, and reading about Yanderes is always a blast, especially Yuri. Pretty crack overall, but it's not something you have to read with a lot of logic in mind, so it's okay. My biggest problem is that it's tiring to read, because of one thing: repetition. It is not a comic gag style repetition, repetitive in words and things that happen. The same dialogues, the same actions, the same reactions, the same descriptions, over and over again. "I wake up and the sunlight makes me stronger" "I'm doing this for security" "Ma'am, she's dangerous""She stretches and everyone looks at her abs", etc. Reduce those repeated phrases/situations and it will be more enjoyable overall.

No te preocupes. No lo agregué al final, pero en realidad se lo llevo a lo que es basicamente su policía personal (cualquiera que venga de parte de Sakura). Bullseye va seguro a la super cárcel. Shoker y Vulture solo escaparon porque se los llevo la policía normal que esta basicamente en los bolsillo de La Maggia en su mayoría.

More or less random It can vary from just seeing seconds to seeing hours. The more the user uses it, the less time in the future they sees and the more they gets lost in visions. For example, if Rogue abused Roulette all the time she could take hours fainted just to see seconds into the future, but if she used it sparingly she could see hours instantly. It's still random, but not completely. I'll use hidden D20s to represent this as best I can.

En el caso de La Maggia en realidad es especialmente complicado porque de hecho, están en Europa. 🤭

I've read this before. I don't know when or where, but I did. Same with the whole infiltration part and becoming a ghost to spend the night unfound. Am I having a weird deja vu? Did you upload this somewhere else or did you get a lot of inspiration from another fanfic?

Thanks for the chapter. Though you should probably mention that Kashou and Bakuya are sort of an exception to your "no Noble Phantasm" thing, since they are, in fact, Noble Phantasms.

Tendré que comprar otro cargador. Escribir no es problema, editar es lo que realmente me está sacando de quicio. Y justo cuando decidí que era hora de ponerme a editar los capítulos más viejos. D:

Yes.