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Очень слабо. Есть несколько вопросов к автору: В чем был смысл растягивать главы в начале без точек зрения персонажей (например лорда Блека? Очень сомнительно что пару абзацев пояснили мышление и приоритетов Арктура) Брат Гарри так вообще очень вафельный на этапе 2го года обучения... Я понимаю что фанфиков много и сделать "авторский" пипец как тяжело (я пробовал) Просто... долго и очень скучно-пресно, но я знаю что обязательно найдутся люди которым это понравится, так что автор не унывай, все ок, на каждого будет его аудитория. Удачи и совершенствуся.!

"The Pack thing" is really outdated. Everyone wants packs or action or something else. I think that you need to first create and add some details and depth to the characters, and only then do something. There is no point in jumping into the fire right away, many fanfic "writers" suffer from such crap. My personal opinion is this: Take the first season (entirely) as a basis for developing the characters' personalities and at the same time not deviate too much from the canon, and after the first season you can go along the parabola. If you change the timeline too quickly, you will get complete crap and not a fanfic. Honestly, this feature with "I'm a cool shapeshifter" is too much for the beginning. I would like a warm relationship line with this girl, a couple of dates, a couple of picnics and a couple of warm evenings at home...

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Cool. Very good gob. at times it's a bit of nonsense, of course, but what can you do if Black Light is a pretty top-notch ability at the initial stage.

Holy shit... this is cool!!! Really cool, there are very few fanfics about Prototype, only this gives 5* I read a lot of fanfics, mostly Potter (since I'm a fan) and I understand where the story is cool and where it's not. This is a really cool story. You're cool!