Elriejn_Eternal

It is nice so far, the quotes are slightly hard to figure out who is speaking. The concept is cool! Hope you find time to update

Also Pei Ling isn't annoying for no reason. She is obviously jealous because she just got married and other women are instantly disrespecting her space with her partner. Usually in Ancient china parents marry their children off behind closed doors. You don't get to simply "marry" legally without your parents, otherwise it is considered dishonerable. It is also kind of the same in modern china. You need your parent's blessing, it also depends on how traditional your parents are and what the situation is.

This message will be deleted in 3 days time. I am going to assume you don't know what a prologue is and tell you that the desciption of He Shen being born is only in that chapter and even that chapter only provides what year He Shen was born. It isn't too fast paced. It ends with talking about one noble who didn't know how to keep their head down, then introducing Pei Ling in the next chapter. In the past joining families happens a lot for either protection or influence. I am not explaining which one for the concubines yet. However in terms of what concubines are to the emperor they are unmarried women that were selected to be the emperor's slaves in a way to pay for expenses for their families or other stuff. In this case they basically are sworn to He Shen to cook an clean. They are house servants as of now. "Small wives". Besides why would I spoil a good chunk of the story if it would be better somewhere else where it can become an established idea?

Okay here is the deal. I am trying to re-edit the work. Just so you know I post entire arcs all at once. Don't feel intimidated it is just that I thought I would be finished with the book soon. I am slowly fixing the chapters of the second arc. Hope to see you soon.

I will, but someone gave it one star and said it was too fast paced so I am going to rewrite the last 8 chapters and publish it again. The estimated time to republish is 1-2 years.

Wow thanks you for your very strong opinion, Zebuniza. I am very sorry that my book led to such a strong negative response where you have nothing to say about where I did good. I am also sorry that you can't understand the way I write, I shouldn't have done that. You don't like the characters before they even have the chance to make development. You don't like how fast paced it is even though at the beginning you simply need exposé into what happened. I also apologize that the MC feels like a tool. I guess that was my intended effect to show that Gao He Shen is living for other people or that I am trying to force development on Pei Ling to be selfish and petulant even though she is a character from the palace who had everything handed down to her. I would, and many other authors practicing their craft especially since this is material that I am not used to writing, would appreciate if you give both positive and negative feedback because it sounds like you are attacking me just to state that you can't understand my writing type. If you hate my work so much that it can only inspire you to write only negativity, there are other books to read that can do it for you and you can leave as soon as you pick up one of my books if you despise my work this much. Thank you for your critisism and may you learn how to do constructive critisism in due future. - The Author

but yeah it does mean that women who have XY chromosome are infirtile. I actually saw your comment when and looking through comments. accidentally clicked your profile comments popped up. Please pardon my nosy self

Swyer syndrome*

Well true it would be frowned upon but the point of it was to keep the elder from marrying their "son" off and the elder and the general were not buying it.

... this is what I was talking about broseph